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雅思作文高分范文及点评:教育类

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题目:

Most countries spend lots of money on education as they start to recognize its importance. In your opinion which two following subjects are the most important for your people and which one is the least important?

  Subject:
  Literature Sports
  Mathematics Economy
  Physics History

  Music Geography


范文:

  It has been said that investing in education is investing in one’s future: this is true for both individuals and nations. It is always somewhat subjective to say which is more important, the humanities or sciences, as both have value. However, I would like to make a case for the importance of math and economics in this day and age.
  Let us begin with math. Mathematics is a foundation subject which bridges many different fields, from physics and chemistry to the Internet and modern medicine. All of our material advances in the 20th century could not have happened without advanced mathematics. To be sure, it will also play a critical role in meeting challenges like global warming and space travel, to name just a few, in the future.
  Likewise, economics is a fundamental discipline that allows societies to be stable and move forward. History is full of example of kingdoms and empires that collapsed as their economies declined. Most obviously, we need look no further than the current economic meltdown to see the importance of economics. The jobs and wellbeing of individuals and nations alike depend upon a deeper understanding of this field.
  While all subjects have their merit, perhaps Geography doesn’t have the same importance it once did. After all, in our modern world we have 3-D maps online that allow us to see anywhere with the click of a mouse. But to reiterate, we need a balanced approach to education where we still produce artists and thinkers and historians and so on.
  To summarize, math and economics are critical subjects in the 21st century. Governments must do their part to make sure we invest in these key areas and have qualified teachers. By doing so, they will ensure our prosperity and progress.

  (294 words)


Harvey点评:
  写作观点:数学、经济学重要,地理不重要。所以文章中间三段分别讨论三个学科。
  这篇文章题型少见,题目内容对中国考生来说比较另类。说明哪个学科的重要性不难,难的是说明一个学科为什么不重要,还注意到题目中有最高级词汇:the most important, the least important。
  我们受到的教育是行业没有三六九等,行行出状元。如果在小学课堂上讨论此类题目,有小朋友胆敢说地理最不重要,老师一定会发飙:“胡说,不要有偏见,各个学科都重要,人类都需要,缺一不可。”于是大家考试不能偏科,长大之后都没有了“偏见”。
  而这篇文章就是逼着你写出偏见,让你偏科,还很极端,因为题目中有最高级。
  所以我最欣赏的是在本文首段第二句话,在表达个人偏见前的让步:It is always somewhat subjective(主观的) to say which is more important, the humanities(人文学科) or sciences, as both have value. 这句话我相信也是大多数考生看完题目后的第一感觉,但表达不出来。
  先学习下面的词汇和短语,然后再重读范文,体会它们在文中的运用
  词汇
  subjective adj.主观的
  foundation n.基础
  bridge vt.架桥,连接
  critical adj.关键的,重要的
  meltdown n.彻底垮台
  wellbeing adj. 福利,康乐,安宁
  reiterate vt.反复地说,重申
  短语
  invest in投资于
  make a case for 提出充分的理由
  in this day and age 当今
  play a critical role in 起到关键作用
  meet challenge 应对挑战
  to name just a few 等等 = and so on
  depend upon依赖,依靠
  allow sb. to do sth. 使某人能做某事
  with the click of a mouse 只需鼠标一点
  do one’s part to尽自己的职责
  key areas 重要领域
  三分钟熟读或背诵本文最实用的三个句子
  It is always somewhat subjective to say which is more important, the humanities or sciences, as both have value.
  Mathematics is a foundation subject which bridges many different fields, from physics and chemistry to the Internet and modern medicine.

  All of our material advances in the 20th century could not have happened without advanced mathematics.

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                                                             来源: 《最简化雅思写作》刘洪波

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